People are shuffling around grabbing bags,hugging loved ones. Business men are walking by with their briefcase's checking their watches. A group of women in Indian garb scuffle by speaking loudly in Indian. Two girls are looking at the incoming flights on the screen and checking their cell phones. One girl is looking worried and excited, she has shoulder length auburn hair and is wearing a sun dress. CALEY THOMAS (22)Her eyes are darting around and she looks like she is searching for someone. MICHAELA MCLAIRD (21) is her friend who is not as excited but is looking at her phone and the screen and talking to caley.
Caley spots her british boyfriend BENJAMIN DOBSIN (24) Tall gangly boy with strange attire and a classic british hair cut. Caley runs towards him
Caley
Ben! Over here!
Ben looks around and finally makes eye contact with Caley and walks briskly towards her. Smile getting bigger with every step.
Benjamin
Hello darling! Well customs took for bloody ever, you weren't waiting to long I hope?
Caley and Benjamin embrace and give eachother a quick peck. Benjamin shifts his luggage around so that he can put his arm around Caley and they walk on together.
Caley
No we weren't waiting long. I did start to get anxious though.
Benjamin
We? Who's with you?
Caley
This is Michaela. She drove down with me. Remember I've told you about her.
They walk towards Michaela and Caley presents her to Benjamin. Benjamin looks Michaela up and down and his face soon turns from a smile to a look of utter dissatisfaction.
Benjamin
Well that top isn't too flattering on you now is it?
(Beat)
Michaela takes her hand back from presenting it to Benjamin. She looks down at her plain V-neck shirt and looks to Caley for what to say next.
Caley
Umm. Ben! Ben's a fashion designer. He's not afraid to speak his mind
Michaela
Well... Nice to meet you.. Benjamin was it? Let's get to the car. Parking is going to cost a fortune if we just stand here.
Caley looks at Michaela with an apologetic half smile, Michaela does not respond. Caley looks back at Benjamin and he gives her a squeez and they walk out of the automatic doors.
CUT TO:
(O.S.) Parking lot.
They reach the car and Michaela unlocks her drivers side door, Caley climbs in the back with Benjamin and they drive off.
Michaela pulls out a handgun and shoots Benjamin in the face.
Michaela
That face of yours wasn't to flattering on you.. was it?
Fade to black
Ok I know that was awful. But I gotta start somewhere!
3 comments:
hahah the ending...oh my! haha
Why does it always feel so satisfying to end with someone getting shot? I guess Bono was right. "Shooting people is easy"
good job.
P.s. your letter was wonderful, well needed and on the spot. good Jesus skills. ...tell your church.
thank you. is there anything wrong with the structure?
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